"Wanna see something cool?" Roscoe asked.
"Define 'cool'," Llewelyn said.
Suddenly, Roscoe was gone, replaced by a jet-black horse with rippling wings.
"Holy cow!" Llewelyn shrieked, jumping back.
"Holy horse, actually," Roscoe said, human again.
He shrugged and gave a characteristic flip of his bangs.
Llewelyn found it hard to close her mouth. "H-how did you do that?"
"I can do half-and-half too," Roscoe said.
Llewelyn's blue eyes grew huge as her boyfriend's wings shot like weeds from his shoulder blades. The feathers were sloppy and bent, growing all over the place, but glossier than glass.
Roscoe flipped his bangs. "Intimidating, aren't I?"
"Happy Halloween?" Llewelyn asked weakly.
He shook his head. "I'm the real deal, baby."
Llewelyn fainted. When she came to, she was lying face-up in the pasture, so still that a small green lizard had settled between her breasts.
She leaped to her feet and got a major headrush.
"Ugh," she moaned.
A soft whicker nudged her ears.
She turned to see Roscoe, her black pony, trot towards her. "Hey, boy," she said. "I just had the weirdest dream."
Roscoe's eyes twinkled. He stared straight at her.
Then, he flipped his bangs.
lol
I started laughing so hard when I read this...right in the middle of Computers class!
That is really a cool story! I loved it!
All of the grammatical errors that I noticed were already pointed out by Azila, but I agree with the Moogles person about the lack of description for Llewelyn. I had an image of her in my head but, you know.
I loved the fact that it was so random! Great connection between the boy and the horse!
Awwww I liked this.
It was a very cute and sweet story. Very nice to read.
I think you ended it perfectly. ^_^
Nice Job.
I thought the story was pretty cool, but I do think that you need to dramatize your character's reactions a little more. Also, some more detail would be nice, but overall I really liked it.
Fangala the Flying Feline wrote:"Wanna see something cool?" Roscoe asked.
"Define 'cool'," Llewelyn said.
Fangala the Flying Feline wrote:"Holy cow!" Llewelyn shrieked, jumping back.
Fangala the Flying Feline wrote:Llewelyn found it hard to close her mouth. "H-how did you do that?"
"I can do half-and-half too," Roscoe said.
Fangala the Flying Feline wrote:Llewelyn's blue eyes grew huge as her boyfriend's wings shot like weeds from his shoulder blades. The feathers were sloppy and bent, growing all over the place, but glossier than glass.
Fangala the Flying Feline wrote:Llewelyn fainted.
Fangala the Flying Feline wrote:A soft whicker nudged her ears.
Fangala the Flying Feline wrote:She turned to see Roscoe, her black pony, trot towards her. "Hey, boy," she said. "I just had the weirdest dream."
Roscoe's eyes twinkled. He stared straight at her.
Then, he flipped his bangs.
Very enjoyable. I liked the connection. My only fault is a lack of description of the Main Character. All we really nkow is that it's a girl, but other than that it's like looking at a hazy person. Perhaps try some sort of minor expansion to help us see her more clearly.
That was great. At first I was wondering why you were dumping us in the middle of a "guess what I've been hiding the fact that I'm an [insert monster here]."
I laughed so hard. XD Which isn't good, considering I'm in class. Excellent work!
That was cool! I like stories where dreams and reality coexist in a kind of creepy way!
However, there are a lot of grammalical errors and typos that make me think you haven't edited it 
"Wanna see something cool?" Roscoe asked.
"Define 'cool'," Llewelyn said.
Suddenly, Roscoe was gone, replaced by a jet-black horse with rippling wings.
"Happy Halloween?" Llewelyn asked weakly.
A soft whicker nudged her ears.
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